I’m super scared.
- Oh wow, cutie! Did you make this sprite? It’s really good!
==> Be the introverted surgeon.
Your name is CIRRUS KAUTRI. You are 6.92 sweeps to be specific, or just annoying. You tend to keep track of the DATES and TIMES for silly reasons. It’s more like to keep your BAD MEMORY in check. You’re an extremely INTROVERTED TROLL who resides on a HUGE AS FUCK cliff, away from Troll society. The trolls who do visit, as FEW as they are, you TEND to AVOID. It’s not that you’re SCARED, it’s just that you much prefer to AVOID CONFLICT that your species tend to create. But, if they come after you, they’d WISH they HADN’T.
- This has nothing to do with your troll- this opening paragraph is quite strong, actually- but I think you can reign back the capitalization a bit. Save it for really important phrases. ;3
Your lusus is a GIANT SQUAWKBEAST, who tends to MESS WITH YOUR HAIR. So your hair tends to be in a DISHEVELED MESS, which takes HOURS to redo, only to have it messed up, later. So you don’t even try to stay NEAT. (Even though being MESSY really bothers you.)
In fact, you ALWAYS look like a disheveled wreck. Your lusus flies off on an adventure to STEAL CULLED TROLL’S CLOTHING for you, it uses it to make a “NEST” but, you steal some that catch your OCULAR ORBS. The KEY you wear? Something stolen from a CULLED TROLL, you don’t have the LOCK so it’s PRETTY MUCH USELESS. You still like it though.
Your lusus also steals OTHER DEAD LUSII to GORGE itself on but, you steal some of the carcasses to DISSECT.
- I like the idea of wearing a key that opens an unknown lock. Who knows what it could be to, ooooo.
When you get OLDER, you want to be a SERGEONATOR, saving other trolls on the BATTLEFIELD. So you’ve been PRACTICING surgery on them. You even keep some of the ORGANS in PRIME HEALTH in glass JARS, so you can study them later. It’s VERY INTERESTING.
- SERGEONATOR. That’s awesome.
Your STRIFE SPECIBUS is SCALPELKIND. It
helps you cut open those LARGE LUSII and is a
deadly weapon to anyone within a meter
- Hahaha, meter radius.
In your spare time you enjoy reading CRIME
NOVELS, like Sherlock Trollmes. It gives you
GREAT INSIGHT at the type of GRIZZLY
WOUNDS and VICTIMS you may encounter
later in LIFE. You have heaps of other GRUESOME books which have photos OF THE MOST GHASTLY crime scenes. You don’t understand why your other TROLL FRIENDS think it’s STRANGE.
- Hahaha Sherlock Trollmes. Well done.
- You stated a bit earlier that she avoids others, so the mention of friends here is a bit confusing.
Your obsession with KEEPING TRACK of TIME
is because; you can’t WAIT to be enlisted in the
ARMY. Just a FEW more SWEEPS, you tell
YOURSELF. You get so hyped up, you BOUNCE
OFF THE WALLS. Figuratively, of course.
You’re a upper-class teal-blooded troll and
your TROLLTAG is CautiousCoroner and you
tend to speak in a lOgiCal yet quite Submissive
way, with Slight jumps when yOu talk..
- First word of the trolltag should not be capitalized.
Name: Cirrus Kautri
Age: 6.92 sweeps (14 years)
Strife Specibus: ScalpelKind
Fetch Modus: Balloon, when she needs an item,
she has to find the right coloured balloon and pop it with her ScalpelKind. If she gets the wrong one, the Balloon goes soaring into the sky.
- This fetch modus is a little too ‘literal’ for me. The modii are meant to be abstractions, so something that has to be physically interacted with is always a little dodgy. I’d recommend something more obtuse!
- Otherwise, she’s quite good! I didn’t have much to critique, which is always an awesome sign. Nice work!